When~
We embraced first time
I held you very tight
It was not the fear of
losing you
To owe you forever
Or to lose you ever
Was never in my mind
Feelings were as chaste
and clear
Just like the prayers
Of an innocent child
There
was no pretence
No
encumber of expectations
My
heartbeats were very high
I
was just very nervous
My
eyes were very shy
To
meet your eyes
I
broke in your arms
So
that my shyness
Can find place to
hide
Took
me long to deem
Now
the moment has arrived
You
are beside
Upheld
my face
Tenderly
in your palms
Your
eyes read the emotions
I
could no longer hide
Numb
and coy
Quivered
deep inside
I
again held you very tight
When~
We embraced first time....
WHEN I WAS LOST IN ME...
@Copyrightg 2012- Manisha Bhatia
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22 comments:
You told me so give a critic comment...
:D
I am speechless...
Gorge-Awesome Creation Dearo! :D
amazing poem :)
though there was a difference in complexity in different stanzas, second one was simpler than the other two, so it created a little of an imbalance. but on the whole, awesome :)
This is really beautiful and very deep. Loved it.
Emotional, tender.....
it's as awesome as alwaz...ur writings show the true meaning of love..:)
nice poem mani :)
reminding of fresh, just blossoming love
Beautiful, sweet, and honest. Lovely poem.
You're such a romantic my dear. This was lovely and raw, I could see him reaching for your face...
First time, always had that special corner in the memoir of our hearts...
How I wish...that first time stayed much longer.
Once again...a beautiful piece.
My dear Mani,
I can tell you are a romantic at heart. You are also very talented. Good job with this poem. I hope you will never stop writing such beautiful words.
@sumit- Thanks dearo :)
@Terence- The critic review was quite appreciated and will be in future Thans!
Mani
@Janu- Thanks janu!
@Alka , Anurag, and Mohit- :) Dearos
@LEah- Aww! Thanks leah!
Mani
@Fher- Truly Fher thanks much~
Love
Mani
@andy- Thanks andy...u r indeed far ahead...Love Mani
OH SO ROMANTIC....HMMM:p
u are a true blue romantic. Beautifully expressed as always. direct impact!
awesome.......
lovely poem.....
no words 4 such a nice poem
only i can say here
"hats of 2 u yr....."
ya dil manga more aha.....!!!!!!
What a lovely moment Mani!
http://lyricfire.typepad.com/lyric-fire/2012/04/lyric-fire-napowrimo-2012-day-six-of-30-poems-in-30-days-love-letter-to-haiku-a-haiku-about-haiku.html
that is so full of love..
we always remember the energy and freshness of initial days :)
Awesome read !!
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